
The Teacher
Teaching students like a machine,
Teach, teach, teach and teach.
But the words go in and always come out,
And they never show any gratitude at all.
Teaching Secondary four students English,
Grammar, Tenses and Vocabulary.
But they never take it to heart,
And their composition writing was a piece of shit!
Just like one girl,
Teaching her for four years.
But her composition get worse everyday,
Totally no hope.
Needing to sit for General Certificate of Education
In three months time,
But her composition was still full of mistakes.
Worse is, she can only write one sentence correctly.
Teaching till our faces turn blue,
But they just didn't care.
Asking her to write about "The Strangers",
In the end she writes about her father caning her.
I have no alternative but to give her a F9,
God! How i wish i could help her.
News reach the school,
That the girl jump down from the eleventh floor.
Such a shy and timid girl,
How i wish i could help her and she could share her trouble,
But... she was just a fragile girl.
I am zack. Your poem sounds a little like singlish. Very good, you described the teacher using similes, personification but you should use a little bit of rhyme. Come comment my blog!
ReplyDeleteslingish ok. but do u thk 'shit' is accepted in poems?But overall its ok.Check my blog at www.hackemo.blogspot.com The names eugene chan
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ReplyDeleteGood phrasing and also using smiles. I agree with Zachary, use a little rhyming words. It will turn out better.
Some grammar errors and wrong tenses,besides that,your poem's okay..
ReplyDeleteerm... No offence, but I couldn't get clear of the persona. In the first stanzas, you mentioned about "The Teacher" thus, it gives me an idea of a 3rd person account. Until, I continued reading it, I realise you are writing about first person account... Quite confusing (I would say). Anyways, nice try.
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